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Saturday, November 8, 2008

so...


“So, does your wife know you are here?”
She asked him, ruffling his hair as he lay with his head on her chest.
“No.”
“Would she ever know?” She ran her fingers across his bare back and wiped a few sweat beads away.
“No.” He wrapped his arms around her more closely, and buried his head onto her bosom.
“What if she does?”
“She won’t.”
“Hmmmm!”
“You are not convinced.” He lifted his head from her breasts.
“If you are convinced so am I. It’s just that, if she finds out; it’ll be bad for you. But nothing for me.”
“It won’t affect you at all?” he was looking at her face as she said it. She seemed to believe what she was saying.
“No.” She said grinning.
“Why?” He contemplated sitting up. But then her body was too warm to leave. He sank down again, on her side, one arm draped around her belly.
“Coz you came to me. I never called you to come to me. I was never after you.” She looked at him right in the eye.
“And does that make a difference?” He didn't understand it. He did. But then he didn't.
“Amir!”
“Ok. I get it. But I can always say that you enticed me.” He thought that was smart enough.
“Ha! You would never say that.” She laughed
“I wouldn’t? What makes you think so?” He removed his arm from around her tummy.
“Coz I know you.” She stated
“Hmmmmm...” he sank into her again. “Do you?”
“Yes.” He wondered how she could be so sure about everything. Something that his wife never was.
“What do you know about me?”
“I know enough.” She said winking at him. Gently running her long fingers through his hairy chest.
“That’s not an answer.” Her fingers were driving him mad. He caught it and bit into her index finger.
She laughed.
“I know that you do not expect me to say ‘I love you’ to you. And I know that you don’t want to say that to me either. That’s all that you need isn’t it?”

He made love to her till morning. She gave him what he wanted till he left for his home.


24 comments:

Abhi said...

Good one!

But somehow felt that I was able to predict what was going to happen/was happening.

Significance of the title 'so..'?

Usha Pisharody said...

Wow! You slip, with ease, into characters and make them so believable... :)
Waiting... :)

vrinda said...

@ abhi

sorry i spoiled your suspense :) but thanks for liking it all the same...
everything in life starts with a so, but, and....
SO does this story.... :)

vrinda said...

@ Usha
:) thanks a lot..coming from you it means something :)

The Mind Bedouin said...

dear vrinda...
felt like this was happening in front of me.. ur language is so alive.. and expressive... tho u dint put it down in so many words, i felt i knew the characters and their thoughts...
but i hav a ques... did u jus want to recount one of the many scenes frm ur character's life.. like a third person diary entry? or were u tryin to achieve somethin else?
and ya, one correction: i dont think "buried his head onto her bosom" is correct... :)
waitin for ur new posts...

suji said...

highly explosive stuff.. can feel the heat..or watever..:O

Sandeep Balan said...

wow...

the characters you create are so strong yaar...they stand out...its so believable...you infuse life into them....too good...you play around with the practicalities well...hail mallustan...hail mallustan...he he! keep giving us more of such gems...

Sashu... said...

a very very very good one!! juz caught mah attention to the laz word :) i like ur short stories much :)

u hv a fan, vrinda :)!!

vrinda said...

@ bedouin

i really like ur comments...they make me think! i dont know about the diary entry or any other purpose...but i can tell u this...most of my she characters and my he characters have something in common...for instance if u check one of my earlier posts called "over a smoke" http://mywordshop.blogspot.com/2008/04/over-smoke.html u'll see that the 2 chars are similar, if not the same...its not something tht i intend...but something which just hapens...which also tells me that i shud work on my characters a little more....

vrinda said...

@ suji

:)

vrinda said...

@sandeep
thanks a lot...am happy that my characters seem believable....its one thing i've tried to keep in mind when i write.... :)

vrinda said...

@ sashu

*blushes*

Anonymous said...

am back again

does the wife get to know? just curiosity....

nice dialogues....i can actually hear them talking

R

MAN IN PAINTING said...

nice style..simple yet effective..slowly you are developing your own unique style..and it is very good..
wishes..
take care

Usha Pisharody said...

You have been tagged :)
http://rambleononon.blogspot.com/2008/11/corridors-of-time.html

Practical Dreamer said...

i saw this n pic n instantly associated it with "one night stand"...dunno y........
and u r style of writing is great..as always...

vrinda said...

@MIP

thanks a lot :)means a lot to me tht u can see a definite style in my writing

vrinda said...

@ usha

thank u for the tag...wil take it up soon :)

vrinda said...

@Anon

i dint know how the story ends...am curios myself :)

vrinda said...

@ practical dreamer
so i shud prob do away with the fotos to retain suspense?? :)

Sashu... said...

http://sasha-me.blogspot.com/2008/11/butterfly-comes-calling.html

surprise!! :)

Practical Dreamer said...

Not at all...
what i meant to say is that since you have depicted a relationship more deeper than a one night stand, the pic did not go with the words. Anyways...thats completely subjective i guess

xinyi said...

Its beautiful !

i love the way you write. Simple yet so strong. ;D

The characters are so real.

suji said...

think i have seen this pic before, or deja vu..:-)