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Tuesday, February 12, 2008

if it could be

if it could be
that i could drink up pain
i'd do so from you
with a thirst never before
to never let you face fall
t
t
if it could be
that i could grow wings
i'd fly to you
to kiss your cheek
and bring that dimples to show again
t
t
if it could be that
i could be strong
i'd go away from you
to realize that i'd die
away from you
t
t
if it could be that
i'd love you more
God will take you away from me
jealous and greedy
for what no one but you would get....

20 comments:

manu said...

no more powerful tool than poetry and in your hands, you wield magic with it.

vrinda said...

@ manu

ur comments mean everything :)

crumbs said...

:)
cho chweet.

No, seriously, I'm usually not that big a fan of love poems, but this one has a very fresh innocence about it that's pleasantly surprising. It's uncomplicated, simple. Ergo, I likeie likeie

vrinda said...

@ comin from u crumbs...this mean a whooping lot to me...thanks :)

hari(sh) said...

if it could be
that i could write this
i would be you
for i won't be writing this
if i weren't you

spelling mistakes apart, a class apart...guess it was a moment's inspiration :-)

vrinda said...

@ harishettan

i guess it was( a moments inspiration)...and u write far better than most ppl tht i've raed...let alone me :)

vrinda said...

@ harishettan

spelling mistakes rectified :)

vrinda said...
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hari(sh) said...

"everything happens for a reason"....the spelling mistakes had their reason too...and a very robust one at that....errors they might be but they also are eloquent proofs of some-special-thing!!! :-)

neermathalam said...

blessed is the one who inspired you to write this one...

vrinda said...

@ harishettan

am not really sure wat u meant by tht :-|

vrinda said...

@ neermathlam....

i guess am more blessed...to hve someone s spl in my life so that i could take up writing again :)

thanks for ur comment again :)

hari(sh) said...

passion's pen pursues slippery slopes...and presumably u were passionate when u wrote it!!!!

woh toh keyboard ki kusoor thode hi thae...kuch nishaaniyaan saaf nazar aa rahe thae!!!!

hehe!!!

hope u had the measure of the meaning :-)

vrinda said...

@ harishettan

ab jaake sab pata chala....:)

~*. D E E P A .* ~ said...

good one .... direct dil se !

vrinda said...

@ deepa

thanks a lot :)

Sashu said...

again!!! beautiful! esp de faith datz oozin out in de last stanza! de faith n belief in onez love!!!! truly amazing!!!!!

vrinda said...

@ sashu

thnks again 4 u comment...

isn it faith tht drives us along? faith in one's self? and faith in ones love and in another more thn urself???

Usha :) said...

one of the most beloved and filling poems on love that I have ever had the good fortune to read!

Indeed you are blessed:) And may it ever be so:)

P.S. If I may, lol, say this: thank you for dropping by at the blog with your review.

vrinda said...

@ usha

thanks a lot for returning the favour :)

and glad u liked it :)